Read my poem? :S ?

well tbh, it doesn't sound poemy. it sounds more songy at the start. It rhymes well but i don't think it sounds like a poem. Poems are like bundles of metaphores and similies and other crap that doesn't make sence. Im not an expert but im saying what i think. and i have no idea who tommy tiernan is. (i guess some kinda poet) but Shite? is he gunna like that?